Gimme sunshine broh
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EKublai
Very funny, I especially like the censorship part.
The problems I found with it were that you packed too many syllables in some of the lines, which ruined the rhythm. Also, some of the rhymes were pretty forced.
theamazingjamez
Can i confess? I wrote this for a spelling project, so some of the more syllabled (is that a word?) words were required. But I sure am glad you liked it!